Mother Earth is a ticking bomb; we really don’t know when it says stop and can’t take it anymore. Things are happening among us, on earth, today. Climate has change a lot the latest 100 years and even more the latest 50 years. And people are aware of that it’s still changing. Dangerous pollution and cars are just some examples of the reasons to these changes. I will make a try in explaining people’s standpoints but also why people’s realisation came so late, when it comes to climate changing. Don’t we really care about the climate changes at all?
First reason, I think, is that the changes on the world have been very small and it takes a while to see a change and because of that it was difficult to see what happened at first. It’s probably in the latest years that we, ordinary people, have been aware of that our planet is suffering. It is in the latest decades we have been seeing the major changes on climate and the world so therefore the changes are so big now. Of course our easy-going lifestyle of today is a big reason to the climate changes. We have our city-jeeps and drive our cars everywhere. We have a lot more discharges from pollution today and that also affects the world.
Second reason is that we, ordinary people and not the professionals who have been warning about what happened to our world and how the climate have changed, probably think that this climate changing don’t strikes us and we can’t really see the changes so because of that it is difficult to understand the vast problems. It becomes a real problem when we can see living proofs that the climate changes strikes our nature. As an example there were much news, some time ago, about the polar ices and we could se the ice melting on TV and see it in the newspapers. When we saw real proofs it became real and then we thought it was terrible and what we could do about it was probably a common thought.
Third reason is that all these things that are happening to our world and all the dangerous discharges of pollution, mainly from carbon dioxide are hard to understand I think. It is hard to understand what is happening to our nature and of course the fact that climate is changing. Scientists have been warning about these facts for a long time but we have to have in mind that they are the professionals and they know what will happen because of that. It is not easy for ordinary people to know what will happen and which discharges are dangerous to Mother Earth. However many people knows a lot about all dangerous facts. Lots of people actually are very aware of the consequences dangerous discharges will make on nature and live lives were they think about these facts. But still I think that how climate is changing is hard to understand.
Last of all; I do think that most of the people in the world do care about Mother Earth and the fact that climate is changing. I do care about our planet and how discharge affects it. I see that something is happening which is not good for the nature but I think that this is hard to understand. Some scientists have said that our planets have natural climate changes; it goes up and down and has always done. Ok, maybe some changes are natural but all this dangerous discharges that are being made by human forces, in a matter of fact right now, are not good at all. And we need to think about this before nature says stop.
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Dear Rebecca,
SvaraRaderaThank you for your thoughts on the topic of climate change. I enjoyed rading it, and you deal very well with the intended topic!
In your introductory paragraph you describe the topic you will deal with, but the reader has to wait until the third sentence to find out that it is climate change that is the topic. Also, avoid making meta-comments such as !I will make a try in explaining” and “I think”, as they just weaken your argument. Just go for it and make your point clear to the reader! Also, the question you pose at the end of the introduction (don’t use bold face!) is not the one you try to answer in your text. Rather, instead of the last two sentences you could have written e.g. “Why is it that people’s reaction on the problem of climate change has come so late?”, since that is what you try to answer in paragraphs 2,3, and 4. There, you very neatly deal with one idea at a time, just as you are supposed to.
When it comes to topic sentences, try to make them clearer by shortening them, so that the reader has a better chance of perceiving them as “paragraph headings”. In the third paragraph, for instance, where you have a very long and difficult topic sentence, you could have written something like “A second reason is that people won’t change their behaviour unless they are directly affected by climate change.”. You make good use of transitional devices in your topic sentences. However, make sure to say either “First, ...” or “The first reason is that...”, with the definite article. I think you could make even more use of linking devices within your paragraphs!
As to language, there are a few things to think about. First of all, subject-verb agreement, as in “many people knows”. Some of your sentences are quite long – see if you can shorten those in order to make the text clearer. Moreover, make sure not to use “that” after a preposition, as in “people are aware of that”. You are well aware, or very well aware of things, not “very aware”. When you write “in the latest years” you probably mean “during the last few years”. A few times when you write “nature”, I wonder if you actually mean “environment”. Also, when you write about “discharges” I wonder if you mean to say “pollution”.
Looking forward to reading your next blog!
Best,
Marika
Hey Rebecca!
SvaraRaderaI think you are right when you say that people have a hard time making changes over a thing that's so hard to grasp or to begin with, understand.
To me it seems that paragraph one and two deal with the same reasons, us having a hard time understanding the climate change and it's consequenses. Otherwise I think Marika stole all the other things i was gonna comment on in her last paragraph.
Well written text and it was a pleasure to read.